Small, flying creatures,

not to be outdone by more

rooted loveliness, dine from

golden saucers, then,

sun shimmering on slant wings,

move on – beauty on the fly.

                                                                  JDG

Sedoka Version

small flying creatures

dine from golden saucers, then

move on in shimmering sun

~

beauty on the fly

gives more rooted loveliness

pause, before it hurries on

JDG

The sedoka (an ancient  Japanese poetic form)  is an unrhymed, six line poem whose structure is made up of two Katauta ( 5-7-7 syllables in each Katauta ). The first shows a scene and the second shows the same scene but from a different angle. The second may also show a reaction to the first scene.